Project: To inform readers about the incident with Elizabeth Lambert; a New Mexico Soccer player who roughed up a player on the opposing team.
Keywords: Elizabeth Lambert, aggressive plays, YouTube, ESPN, physical sport
Strengths: I think your paper is structured well and it seems like you have put yourself in it; personal views which I like to read. Also, I think you did a good job laying the information out in a step by step, following process.
Weaknesses: Honestly, I don't see any significant weaknesses. I think it's laid out well and it's easy for people to understand.
Additional Comments: I really liked your comment at the end of your paper: "Don’t scrutinize her actions until you run a mile in her soccer cleats." Also, I liked that you took a stance for her by expressing how on-contact soccer can really be. Your personal experience helped out with that.
I don't have access to your paper AJ
ReplyDeleteIt won't let me view it either.
ReplyDeleteProject: To inform readers about the incident with Elizabeth Lambert; a New Mexico Soccer player who roughed up a player on the opposing team.
ReplyDeleteKeywords: Elizabeth Lambert, aggressive plays, YouTube, ESPN, physical sport
Strengths: I think your paper is structured well and it seems like you have put yourself in it; personal views which I like to read. Also, I think you did a good job laying the information out in a step by step, following process.
Weaknesses: Honestly, I don't see any significant weaknesses. I think it's laid out well and it's easy for people to understand.
Additional Comments: I really liked your comment at the end of your paper: "Don’t scrutinize her actions until you run a mile in her soccer cleats." Also, I liked that you took a stance for her by expressing how on-contact soccer can really be. Your personal experience helped out with that.
Project: To portray the story of Elizabeth Lambert, an aggressive New Mexico soccer player, and show how the media can spin stories out of control.
ReplyDeleteKeywords: soccer, Elizabeth Lambert, monster, YouTube, NY Times, suspended.
Strengths: I like that you used your reactions when you first heard the the story and did research to find out where the story first arose.
Weaknesses: I didn't find any weaknesses to the paper.
Additional Comments: Any corrections I made are in red...I'm pretty sure there is only one.